Passing on clarity
August 28, 2008 9:00 am
I came across this sentence in a football story while I was working last night, about an injured quarterback’s workout the day before he returned to practice: “He threw passes with velocity and moved around on his legs.”
Doesn’t anything thrown have velocity? And one would assume he wasn’t in a wheelchair if he was working out and returning to practice.
Better to describe how hard he was throwing and how well he was moving around, which I think is what the writer was unsuccessfully trying to convey.
